# Critique: Equinor — Manager / AI Architect, Agentic Systems (JR106747)

**Resume File:** `output/Equinor_AI_Manager/e2e_equinor_ai_manager_resume.tex`
**Cover Letter:** `output/Equinor_AI_Manager/e2e_equinor_ai_manager_cover_letter.tex`
**Date:** 2026-05-27
**Pass:** 2 (re-score after Edit 1; lens reused from Pass 1, not re-researched)

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## Changes Since Pass 1 (Edit 1, 2026-05-27)

Trajectory: **Pass 1 = 77.5 → Pass 2 = 80.0** (+2.5).

| Edit | Effect |
|---|---|
| SW-7 verb fix ("Built a Data Mesh" → "Helped move Swisscom off legacy Teradata… modelled and built governed data products and onboarded source systems…") | Removed the sole-ownership **overclaim**; surfaced **data-layer architecture** (modelling/design) honestly; bold trimmed so it holds 2 lines (193 chars) |
| Summary hedge ("Software and AI engineer"; "design and build governed data products on the company's AWS Data Mesh") | Accuracy + slightly stronger identity; no "Solution Architect" self-title (correct) |
| Skills: +`orchestration`, +`reference architecture` (dropped redundant "model deployment" / "data catalog") | Two JD terms now verbatim → ATS up |
| Tier 2: removed 3 `-ing` participial trailers (B4/B8/B10) | AI-fingerprint clean; bullets end on concrete objects |
| CL: 313→300 words + same ownership hedge in P2 | Within industry word target; package cohesion preserved (no contradiction with revised resume) |

**Re-scored dimensions only** (others unchanged from Pass 1):
- **ATS 8.0 → 8.5** — orchestration + reference architecture now present; ~18/20.
- **Summary 7.5 → 8.0** — hedged, honest, data-product-design identity.
- **Bullets 7.5 → 8.0** — overclaim fixed, `-ing` trailers gone, data-layer architecture surfaced (still no metrics — accepted per user).
- **Narrative 8.0** (unchanged), **Skills 8.5** (unchanged), **Credibility 7.5** (unchanged — honesty fix is a wash with the still-absent metrics/management), **Visual 7.5** (unchanged), **Credentials 7.5** (unchanged).

**Verdict:** Converged near the achievable ceiling (~81 with metrics excluded per user; hard ceiling ~83 on structural gaps). No remaining Tier 1 fixes. **Submit.**

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> **Strategic frame (from session file):** HONEST STRETCH / reach application. Required agent-framework + GenAI-architecture + formal-management evidence is thin. Positioned as senior production-AI/MLOps engineer with architecture breadth reaching toward agentic architect — not a checkbox match. Critique scores against that reality, not against an imaginary perfect-fit candidate.

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## Domain-Specialist Lens (researched for this JD)

### Reviewer Persona
Equinor AI/ML architecture lead or principal engineer in the AI & ML Engineering org (Stavanger/Oslo). Runs industrial ML at scale already — Omnia data platform on Azure, EurekaML, Prevent (520+ production models on rotating equipment). Pragmatic about the demo-to-production gap; has watched the 2025/26 agentic hype cycle and knows ~11% of enterprises actually run agents in production. **Impressed by:** real production ML under operational constraints, reliability/safety rigor, honest responsible-AI substance, architecture judgment across layers. **Bored/alarmed by:** agent-framework name-dropping with no depth, inflated GenAI claims, "I built an agent in a notebook" framed as production. Has likely seen 80–150 applications for a role this senior and visible.

### Company Context
International energy company, HQ Norway, net-zero-by-2050, ~25k staff, energising 170M people. This role builds the *foundation* for enterprise-scale agentic AI: reference architecture, production agents (orchestration, grounded retrieval, MCP tool access, multimodal doc understanding), responsible AI (GDPR/EU AI Act, policy-as-code, bounded autonomy, human oversight, safe fallback/rollback), engineering-quality uplift, mentoring. Tech reality: Azure-native (Omnia, EurekaML on Azure ML/Synapse/Cosmos), Prevent saved ~$130M in 2025 via predictive maintenance. Culture: open/collaborative/courageous/caring, safety-first / zero-harm.

### JD Vocabulary Extraction (top terms, ranked)
| # | JD Term | Freq / Placement | Meaning at Equinor | Resume Match? |
|---|---------|------------------|--------------------|---------------|
| 1 | **architecture / AI Architect** | Title + repeated (reference architecture, blueprints, architect solutions, across data/model/app layers) | Set technical direction & solution patterns across the org | **PARTIAL — under-foregrounded** |
| 2 | agentic AI / agents | Title + body, ~5x | Production agents that automate workflows & sharpen decisions | YES (agentic workflows) |
| 3 | agent frameworks (LangGraph/AutoGen/LangChain/LlamaIndex/Semantic Kernel) | Required qual, named | Hands-on framework depth | **NO — intentional honest gap** |
| 4 | grounded retrieval / RAG | Body | Agents query governed data | YES |
| 5 | MCP-based tool/data access | Body + preferred | Standardised tool access | YES (MCP tooling / MCP-based) |
| 6 | structured LLM integration w/ enterprise APIs | Body | LLM-to-system wiring | YES (LiteLLM gateway) |
| 7 | orchestration | Body | Multi-step agent control | **NO — not verbatim** |
| 8 | multimodal document/image understanding, diagram Q&A, speech-to-text | Preferred | Doc understanding for agents | PARTIAL (image + speech YES; "document understanding" NO) |
| 9 | responsible AI / GDPR / EU AI Act / policy-as-code / bounded autonomy / human oversight / safe fallback+rollback | Body, heavy | Safe non-deterministic systems | YES (strong) |
| 10 | concept → production, measurable business impact | Required | Ship, don't prototype | YES on concept→prod; **WEAK on measurable impact (no metrics)** |
| 11 | Python + SWE fundamentals (testing, CI/CD, version control) | Required | Engineering rigor | YES |
| 12 | Azure (Azure ML, AKS, Azure OpenAI) | Preferred | Their actual cloud | **NO — intentional honest gap (AWS instead)** |
| 13 | technical leadership / mentoring / publishing / speaking / OSS | Preferred | Influence beyond self | PARTIAL (mentoring/leadership YES; publishing/OSS/speaking NO) |
| 14 | Manager / people leadership | Title | Lead engineering teams | **NO — intentional honest gap** |

### Domain Vocabulary Map
| Resume Currently Says | Should Say for THIS JD | Why |
|---|---|---|
| Tagline: "AI/ML Engineer \| Agentic Data Foundations..." | Surface **"Solution Architecture"** in tagline | Role title is *AI Architect*; candidate holds AWS SAA + iSAQB CPSA — architecture is an honest, on-title signal currently hidden |
| Summary: "Software engineer with 11+ years..." | "Software/AI engineer and **solution architect**..." | Reviewer scans for architecture in first 2 lines; "software engineer" reads junior-er than the role |
| "agentic workflows query for grounded retrieval" | add **orchestration** where truthful (K8s/pipeline orchestration, agent workflow orchestration) | JD names orchestration as a core agent task; currently absent verbatim |
| "image classification, speech recognition, multimodal" | add **document understanding** if truthful | Preferred qual phrase; image+speech present but not "document" |
| iSAQB CPSA buried at cert #4 | promote architecture cert visibility | Direct "Software Architecture" credential for an Architect role |

### Gap Ranking
- **Fatal (cause rejection at a strict screen):** Named agent frameworks (LangGraph/AutoGen/Semantic Kernel) — required qual, named, zero match. This is the structural ceiling and is *intentionally* not bridged (anti-fabrication). No mitigation possible without real experience.
- **Serious (competitive candidates will have):** Azure depth (their cloud); measurable business-impact metrics; formal people-management (role says "Manager"); production RAG + formal model evaluation.
- **Cosmetic (most candidates also miss):** publishing/speaking/OSS; red-teaming/content moderation; diagram Q&A.

### Methodology Transfer Test
| Achievement | How Equinor's expert sees it |
|---|---|
| Bosch ML inference in 24/7 fab (BS-1) | "Direct analogue to Prevent — always-on industrial ML on safety-critical assets, no maintenance window. This is exactly our operating regime." **Transfers cleanly.** |
| AWS Data Mesh / governed data products (SW-7) | "This is our Omnia, on the other cloud — governed data layer agents ground against. Architecture-relevant." **Transfers, but on AWS not Azure.** |
| LiteLLM gateway + custom GPTs (SW-GenAI) | "Real LLM integration plumbing, multi-provider. Not agent-framework orchestration, but honest adjacent." **Partial transfer.** |
| Security Champion + GDPR/governance (SW-5) | "Responsible-AI substance, not buzzwords — maps to our EU AI Act / policy-as-code mandate." **Transfers.** |
| K8s + CI/CD + rollback (SW-3) | "Engineering-quality and safe-rollout discipline we want." **Transfers.** |

Four of five transfer cleanly or partially — the reframing largely worked. The one that *can't* be written honestly is "hands-on with LangGraph/Semantic Kernel," and the resume correctly does not pretend otherwise.

### Competitive Landscape
- **Obvious-fit candidate:** Has shipped LLM agents with LangGraph/Semantic Kernel on **Azure OpenAI** + production RAG, ideally with an architecture title and some team leadership. Probably has a conference talk or OSS repo.
- **Our advantage:** Rarer industrial **zero-downtime production-ML** credibility (Bosch fab ↔ Prevent), genuine security/governance/responsible-AI discipline, and authentic **Norway fit** (year in Bergen, basic Norwegian, ready to relocate). We win on reliability + responsibility + culture/relocation, not on agentic-framework hours.
- **Their advantage:** Named-framework hands-on, Azure, formal management, possibly publishing. Several of these are structural and uncloseable truthfully right now.

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## Five-Perspective Read-Through

### ATS Robot (keyword scan)
| JD Keyword | Match |
|---|---|
| agentic AI / agents | YES |
| architecture / reference architecture | PARTIAL (no "reference architecture"; "architecture" weak) |
| orchestration | NO |
| grounded retrieval | YES |
| RAG | YES |
| LLM integration / LLM providers | YES (multi-provider via LiteLLM) |
| MCP | YES |
| multimodal / image / speech-to-text | YES |
| document understanding | NO |
| prompt design | YES |
| model evaluation | YES |
| responsible AI / GDPR / EU AI Act | YES |
| policy-as-code / human-in-the-loop / fallback+rollback | YES |
| Python / CI/CD / version control | YES |
| Docker / Kubernetes | YES |
| concept-to-production | YES |
| measurable business impact | WEAK (no metric) |
| mentoring / technical leadership | YES |
| agent frameworks (named) | NO (intentional) |
| Azure | NO (intentional) |

**Match rate:** ~16/20 ≈ 80% → **PASS.** Misses split into *fixable* (orchestration, reference architecture, document understanding) and *intentional honest gaps* (named frameworks, Azure).

### Recruiter Glance (10 seconds)
**Verdict: Maybe → Forward (≈55%).** Strong current title (Staff … AI Engineer at Swisscom), Bern→Norway relocation stated up front, AWS SAA visible. Friction: tagline and summary self-label "AI/ML Engineer / Software engineer" rather than the *Architect* the req is titled for — a recruiter pattern-matching the title may hesitate.

### HR Screen (30 seconds)
**Verdict: Borderline → Phone screen (≈50%).** Master's ✓, Python ✓, production AI ✓, GDPR ✓. The named-agent-framework required qual is unmet and an HR checklist screen may catch it. Summary bridge is good but doesn't say "architecture."

### Hiring Manager (2 minutes)
**Verdict: Maybe (≈30–40%).** This is the decisive reader and the honest crux.
**Top 3 observations:**
1. "Bosch 24/7 fab ML = our Prevent regime. Rare and real — this person has actually operated always-on industrial ML." (Strong positive.)
2. "Genuine responsible-AI/governance substance, not buzzwords. Good for our EU AI Act mandate."
3. "But no named agent-framework hands-on, no Azure, no quantified impact, and it's a *Manager* role with no people-management shown." (The cap.)
**Predicted first interview question:** *"Walk me through the most complex LLM/agent integration you've built end-to-end — what orchestration and tool-access patterns did you use, and where did it run in production?"* (This probes exactly the soft spot; bridge points below prepare for it.)

### Technical Reviewer (10 minutes)
**Truthfulness: one overclaim caught (now corrected in Tier 1).** The SW-7 bullet "Built a Data Mesh…" implied sole ownership of a *company-wide* platform migration — user confirmed he contributed to it, not solo-built it. Hedged rewrite in Tier 1. Other spot checks clean:
- Security Champion "(2025/26)" — matches correction log (not 3 years, not an award). ✓
- No LangChain/LangGraph/LlamaIndex/Semantic Kernel/AutoGen anywhere. ✓
- No Azure claim. ✓
- Languages: German/English/Norwegian only (no French/Italian boilerplate). ✓
- Generali = Hamburg. ✓ Bosch = Dresden. ✓ Vizrt = Bergen (reinforces Norway thread). ✓
- "11+ years" (2015→2026). ✓
- CL hooks (Prevent 520+ models, ~$130M) — verified in session. ✓
- "AWS Solutions Architect" in summary = held cert, accurate framing.
**Consistency: clean** — CL claims all trace to resume bullets; no new unsupported achievements. **One AI-fingerprint flag** (below): three bullets end on participial trailers ("enabling…", "providing…", "supplying…").

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## Eight-Dimension Scoring

| Dimension | Score | Weight | Weighted | Notes |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| ATS Keywords | 8.5/10 | 15% | 1.275 | ↑ orchestration + reference architecture now verbatim (~18/20) |
| Summary | 8.0/10 | 10% | 0.80 | ↑ hedged + honest "Software and AI engineer"; data-product-design identity |
| Skills Section | 8.5/10 | 10% | 0.85 | Excellent group names, honest, strong domain signal; add orchestration/reference-architecture |
| Bullet Quality | 8.0/10 | 25% | 2.00 | ↑ overclaim fixed, `-ing` trailers gone, data-layer architecture surfaced; no metrics (accepted per user) |
| Publications/Credentials | 7.5/10 | 10% | 0.75 | No pubs (honest gap vs obvious fit); certs strong (AWS SAA, iSAQB CPSA, IBM AI Eng) but CPSA buried |
| Narrative Coherence | 8.0/10 | 15% | 1.20 | Clean arc; Bergen→Norway thread reinforces relocation; architecture under-threaded vs title |
| Page Fill & Visual | 7.5/10 | 5% | 0.375 | Compiles clean, 2pp, 0 em-dashes; page 2 ~30% empty (underfill) |
| Credibility Signals | 7.5/10 | 10% | 0.75 | Bosch 24/7 fab rare+credible; lacks quantified impact and any management evidence for a "Manager" role |
| **Total** | | **100%** | **80.0** | Pass 1 77.5 → **Pass 2 80.0** (+2.5) |

**Score: 80.0/100 (Pass 2)** — converged near the achievable ceiling (~81 with metrics excluded per user; hard ceiling ~83 on structural gaps: named frameworks / Azure / people-management). No remaining Tier 1 fixes. **Submit.**

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## Interview Likelihood

| Reader | Probability | Key Factor |
|--------|------------|------------|
| ATS | ~80% | Keyword coverage strong; risk only if filter hard-requires a named framework |
| Recruiter (10s) | ~55% | Title-vs-tagline mismatch (Engineer vs Architect) |
| HR (30s) | ~50% | Named-framework required qual unmet |
| Hiring Manager (2m) | ~30–40% | Bosch/Prevent analogue + responsible-AI substance vs framework/Azure/management gap |
| Technical Panel (10m) | CONCERNS (credible) | Real MLOps/infra depth; thin on agentic-framework orchestration |

### Ceiling Analysis
| Scenario | Est. Score |
|---|---|
| Current | 77.5 |
| + Tier 1 (architecture foreground + orchestration + CPSA surface + 1 real metric) | ~80.5 |
| Theoretical max (this candidate + this JD) | ~82 |
| Hard ceiling (structural: no named frameworks / Azure / people-mgmt) | ~83 |
| What would close the gap | One real hands-on project with a named agent framework (LangGraph/Semantic Kernel) **+** one quantified production-impact metric → +3–4 pts and changes the HM verdict |

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## Actionable Improvements

### Tier 1 (HIGH — do these; ~+2 pts total)

> **Verb-discipline correction (user-confirmed 2026-05-27):** The Swisscom Data Mesh / One Data Platform (ODP) is a *company-wide* migration off legacy Teradata DWH that Dennis **contributed to from the start** — he was NOT the sole driver. His genuine ownership: logical/physical **data modelling** and design of new data products, the implementation, **onboarding source systems** onto the ODP, and as Staff engineer **guiding/mentoring colleagues** on what & how to build (plus helping stand up the new platform's dev/ops processes). Certs give *basic* architecture grounding — do NOT self-title "Solution Architect." User does NOT want quantifications. The original "Built a Data Mesh…" overclaims sole ownership and must be hedged.

1. **Fix SW-7 verb discipline + surface data-layer architecture (the accuracy fix and the on-title win, combined).** — `~+1.2`
   - Current: `Built a \textbf{Data Mesh} of governed data products with metadata management on \textbf{AWS} (Glue, Athena, CloudFormation, CI/CD), the data foundation that AI and \textbf{agentic workflows} query for grounded retrieval.`
   - **Proposed (216 chars, fits 2L):** `Helped move Swisscom from legacy Teradata to a cloud \textbf{Data Mesh} on \textbf{AWS}; modelled and built governed \textbf{data products} and onboarded source systems onto the foundation AI and \textbf{agentic workflows} query for grounded retrieval.`
   - *Why:* "Helped move" hedges the company-wide migration honestly; "modelled / built / onboarded" are full-ownership for work he genuinely did. The data **modelling/design** language is real **data-layer architecture** — the honest way to hit the JD's "architectural experience across the data layer" without claiming an architect title.
   - Summary opener tweak: `Software engineer with 11+ years…` → `Software and AI engineer with 11+ years…`; and `At Swisscom I build the AWS Data Mesh and governed data products…` → `At Swisscom I design and build governed data products on the company's AWS Data Mesh…` (same hedge, preserves page fill). Keep "AWS Solutions Architect" cert mention (honest architecture signal).
   - **Do NOT** add "Solution Architect" to the tagline/summary self-label — overclaims per user (certs = basic architecture grounding only).
2. **Add "orchestration" + "reference architecture / solution patterns" where truthful.** — `~+0.8`
   - Skills (Agentic line or Cloud line): add `orchestration` (K8s/pipeline + agent-workflow orchestration is real).
   - The governed-data-product / ODP work can honestly be described with "reference architecture / solution patterns" language in the skills section (it *is* a governed reference pattern Dennis modelled against). Keep honest.
   - *Why:* JD names both; absent verbatim now and cheap to add truthfully.

   ~~3. Inject quantified business-impact metric~~ — **REMOVED per user (does not want quantifications).** The "measurable business impact" gap is therefore an accepted limitation; achievable ceiling drops ~1 pt accordingly (now ~80.5 → ~81 max with Tier 1).

### Tier 2 (MEDIUM — optional; ~+1 pt)
1. **Fix 3 participial bullet endings (AI-fingerprint).** — `~+0.4`
   - B4 "…enabling serverless data processing for ML and analytics workloads" / B8 "…providing centralized observability for 24/7 semiconductor manufacturing infrastructure" / B10 "…supplying semiconductor analysis teams with structured access…". Restructure so each ends on a concrete object/result rather than an `-ing` trailer. Pattern repeated 3× is a detectable marker.
2. **Add "document understanding" to multimodal skill line** if any doc-parsing work is truthful — `~+0.3`. Otherwise skip.
3. **Tighten CL to ≤300 words** (currently ~313; industry target 250–300) — `~+0.2`.

### Tier 3 (COSMETIC — skip)
1. Page-2 underfill (~30% empty): could add a reserve bullet, but content is already complete and honest; not worth padding.
2. Promote iSAQB CPSA up the cert order (minor; Tier 1 tagline change already surfaces architecture).

### Verdict
**Apply Tier 1.** Tier 1 is fully truthful, on-title, and the highest-leverage set available to a reach application — it raises the recruiter/HR pass-through where this resume is most likely to die. Tier 2 is worth the AI-fingerprint fix if editing anyway. Tier 3 skip. **No accuracy/provenance violations found.** The structural ceiling (named frameworks, Azure, people-management) is real and correctly *not* faked.

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## Cover Letter Critique

**Institution type:** Industry (major energy company, applied AI/architecture org).

**6A — Anti-patterns:** ✓ Opens with a specific Equinor fact (Prevent, 520 models, $130M), not "I am writing to express interest." ✓ No CV-bullet rehash. ✓ Names Prevent + Omnia. ✓ Clear "why this role." ✓ Strongest qualification (Bosch production ML) in P1. ✓ No apologetic/defensive language — the "I will be candid" line is confident, not apologetic. ✓ Active close ("welcome a conversation about where I could contribute first"). **Pass.**

**6B — Tailoring:** ✓ Names Prevent + Omnia (their tech). ✓ Supplements resume with JD terms (rotating equipment, safety-critical, agentic layer, zero-harm). ✓ References mission (energy transition) + culture (zero-harm). ✓ Proposes connection (production-reliability + responsible-AI discipline → "systems you can trust"). **Pass.**

**6C — Industry checks:** ✓ Business-value translation ($130M, "no maintenance window, a wrong call costs yield"). ✓ "Why this" addressed positively. ✓ Jargon HR-safe. **Pass.**

**6D — CL ATS:** Supplementary JD terms present (agentic, grounded retrieval, MCP, GDPR, EU AI Act, responsible AI, CI/CD, rollback, orchestration-adjacent). ~7 high-value terms — good.

**6E — Structural:** Word count ~313 (target 250–300 — slightly long, Tier 2 trim). Tone results-driven ✓. Sentence-length variety good ✓. 0 em-dashes ✓. Domain pivot leads with methodology, not apology ✓. Quantified claims: 520 models, $130M, 300mm, year in Bergen — adequate.

**6F — Package cohesion:** ✓ Resume stands alone (CL deleted, resume still earns its ~same read). ✓ Every CL claim traces to a resume bullet (Data Mesh/Omnia → SW-7; Bosch → BS-1; LiteLLM/GPTs → SW-GenAI; Security Champion → SW-5; K8s/rollback → SW-3). ✓ No contradictions in dates/metrics/framing. ✓ Complements (adds Prevent↔Bosch narrative, Norway motivation, honest agentic-pivot framing) rather than repeating. ✓ Resume+CL = 3pp budget. **Strong cohesion.**

**6G — AI fingerprint scan (12-item):** No Tier 1 banned words; no banned phrases; 0 em-dashes in CL (0 in resume output — the 17 `---` hits are LaTeX comment dividers, not prose); CL opener company-specific; sentence length varied; no metaphorical landscape/journey/realm; no banned adverbs. **Only finding:** the 3 resume bullet `-ing` trailer endings (Tier 2 above). CL clean.

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## Interview Bridge Points

| Resume Topic | Equinor Equivalent | Opening Line |
|---|---|---|
| Bosch ML inference in 24/7 fab | Prevent / always-on industrial ML | "The zero-downtime discipline I ran against 300mm wafer lines is the same regime Prevent operates in — no maintenance window, a wrong call costs yield." |
| AWS Data Mesh / governed data products | Omnia + grounded retrieval for agents | "I built the governed, discoverable data layer agents ground against — the same role Omnia plays for you, just on AWS." |
| LiteLLM gateway + custom GPTs | Structured LLM integration w/ enterprise APIs | "I stood up a multi-provider LLM gateway and grounded GPTs — the integration plumbing under any agent; the agent-framework orchestration layer is where I'd ramp fast." |
| Security Champion + GDPR/governance | Responsible AI / EU AI Act / policy-as-code | "Privacy-by-design and risk monitoring are already how I work — that's the substance behind bounded autonomy and safe fallback, not a checkbox." |
| K8s + CI/CD + rollback | Engineering quality, reliability, safe rollout | "Containerized delivery with safe rollback is my default — that's what turns an agent prototype into something you can trust in production." |
| iSAQB CPSA + AWS SAA | Architecture across data/model/app layers | "I hold a formal software-architecture certification and design across the data and application layers — I reason in trade-offs, scalability, and risk." |
| Year at Vizrt, Bergen | Norway fit / relocation | "I've already lived and shipped in Norway — Bergen, broadcast-scale backend — so relocating back and the culture fit aren't a leap." |

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*End of critique. Pass 1 — score 77.5/100. Honest-stretch reach application; framing well-executed, structural fit ceiling ~83.*
